Julian Part 1

I woke up in the room my grandmother had built just for me. It was perfect, the bed lightly swayed from the ceiling as I adjusted myself to lay on my side. I took in the beautiful view of the ocean shore outside the huge window that comfortably enveloped most of the west side of the bedroom wall. The birds were flying past the window no doubt starting their day off like I was about to. I couldn’t help but wonder how amazing it would be to fly and really feel what it would be like to be completely free. I dangled my arm over the side of the bed and unconsciously swirled it around in the air. I came back out of my daydream to see a dove setting on the window seal. It stared at me for a moment then flew onto my bed. I sat up and stared at it. I wasn’t afraid but rather curious because for some reason I felt like it was staring into my eyes, weird right, and I had this feeling that it knew who I was. It continued to stay there looking at me. It felt peaceful in the room and as weird as this was, I just knew instinctually that it wouldn’t hurt me so I got crawled out of bed. With a huge blissful smile on my face, I skipped over to the swing hanging across from my bed. I sat down in it and gently swayed back and forth in it. I had a peace surrounding me at that moment and had no worries in my mind.
As much as I wanted to continue to stay there and swing, I was excited to get out and see the city. The place was amazing and beckoned me to go explore it. I walked over to the wooden vanity that my grandfather had crafted for me and looked at myself. I was finally turning sixteen tomorrow. It didn’t feel like a major stepping stone to me and I honestly didn’t expect much, but I was excited to spend it with my new family. They made me feel so loved, every time I got near them I could feel the happiness and love rolling off them. I was more use to my new ability of feeling people’s emotions. Grandmother explained to me that not many of the Valenians contained this ability, only a handful in their community did. I knew I was changing, physically and emotionally.
My hair was becoming healthier and more voluptuous. It sounded so weird when I thought about it but…it felt like the strands were getting thicker. I couldn’t explain it and I could just be imagining it, but I did know for sure that my hair was getting darker. Not drastically, but gradually every day I was noticing; I wonder if anyone else was? I looked down at my feet and pulled up the blue pajama pants that my grandmother had given me. I didn’t know what to think of them. Within the last week, it seemed like they were becoming narrower and my toes were becoming pointed, reminding me of ballerina feet, strange… I couldn’t explain these changes and I had not told my grandmother about it yet. I wonder if she could shed some light on it, maybe this is just how Valenian women mature.
As I looked in the mirror, I caught a glimpse of the dove on my bed just before it flew back out the window. Seeing the dove take off I knew I needed to do the same. I picked up the clothes my grandmother had placed in the chair sitting in front of the vanity, and put them on. They were perfect for me! The capris fit well and the t shirt was v cut with a dark blue button down vest. I took the wide toothed brush and brushed out my hair and then took my hair clip I always wore and clipped my hair half way up. I was ready for the day.

Hey Julian, you forgot to brush your teeth! Lol, this is very descriptive. Are you going to write in first person often, and just in Julian's view? I like the first person but it does take away from the fantasy feel, since we're seeing directly through her eyes. Maybe that's what you wanted though, to make it seem a little less fantastical? It's really good. I get the feeling she's becoming part merperson Ha ha. Answer my questions! The dove part is beautiful. Julians surroundings are so perfect. I want to live there

Yeah I think I'm going to switch back and forth on the point of view. I really liked writing in Julian's pov, but I'm not sticking to just her. I love the five prt too!!! There is more to come with it